October 5th, 2005

Poem (genre 2)

                                Savor It All

Everyone thinks bad things happen to everyone else,

but one day I awoke and wasn’t quite myself.

I’m one of those people who would never believe

that this would be the reflection starring back at me.

I still look the same, but I am broken inside.

Tragedy has no favorites, you can never run and hide.

I’ve tired to suppress these secrets when I am out,

but whenever I speak I just want to pout.

I try to remember the words and names,

but whenever I can’t my accident is the blame.

The lessons I’ve learned from taking this fall.

Don’t take life for granted, savor it all.

Posted by miller255 at 03:36 AM | 2 comments
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tutorang2
Comment posted on October 13th, 2005 at 06:05 PM
Voice: The voice of this genre is clearly the voice of the client.

Audience: The audience intended for this genre is the client and client's family.

Say Back: I think the author is describing how the client feels about the changes that have taken place in her life as a result of her injury.

Bless: I thought the poem was really well written and flowed really well. Another thing I thought the last line of the poem was really great because as we go about our day we often take the little things for granted.

Address: I really didn't find anything specific that you needed to change or work on.
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Frazier34
Comment posted on October 10th, 2005 at 04:48 PM
1. Voice
This piece is written in the voice of the client.

2. Audience
This piece is written to friends and family of the client. She writes it to express her feelings.

3. Say Back:
The title indicates that she wants her family and friends to not take anything for granted and "savor" there lives. I think that she is also trying to explain that she can't believe this accident has happened to her. I think she also wants her friends and family to know that she is a different person now even though by outward appearances she is the same.

4. Bless:
I think this is a great poem and I can tell it took alot of time to write.I think it really describes the way a person with a TBI might feel.

5. Address:
You might want to look at the line "By: Andrea, a 27-year-old patient, who sustained a TBI." Even though it's about her, you are still the author. Maybe you could indicate that the poem is about her instead of by her.
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